-The only location that might be tricky is the hospital (although Daniel may come in here!) But if you can film in an actual hospital it will add greatly to the overall effect.
-The only scene I don't quite get is the McDonald's bit - what does it add to the narrative or tell the audience? Will you have music over any of these scenes?
-Another couple of comments: the script looks a little short for three minutes? Generally the
Hollywood rule is one page a minute so in that sense you’re absolutely fine but
each scene seems pretty short… it’s not a major concern as it can be a few
seconds under no problem (2min 45secs is fine).
-Finally, the final
conversation feels very important but is currently set outside (park) – how
will you make sure the audio is good enough here? Also, is it worth adding a
couple of lines to this last conversation to hint further at where the film may
be going?
Next Steps
1 - Altering the script to make it more relevant e.g. cutting the McDonald's scene.
2 - Finalising filming dates and having back-up plans should we encounter unavoidable problems that might hinder our progress.
3 - Filming first scenes on Sat 21st.
2 - Finalising filming dates and having back-up plans should we encounter unavoidable problems that might hinder our progress.
3 - Filming first scenes on Sat 21st.
